Friday, November 6, 2009

"Sarah"

15 comments:

  1. "The sorrow
    deep in dark eyes
    outlined in white
    rings saddens me" This part is very descriptive and sad.

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  2. The poem Sarah was a sad poem. The description of the dog and the word choice the author used was very intreaging.

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  3. The poem Sarah: It is very sad poem!Heartfelt and lovable! It allows people who love animals really connect with the poem and feel the sadness.This poem is well written and great verbs and word choice! It's ideas are wonderful! This poem is great!-Karli

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  4. Hi Jonathan,
    The poem reminded me of when we had to get rid of my dog Lizzy. It sounds like you really loved your dog.

    Thanks
    Harry 7T

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  5. "The sorrow
    deep in dark eyes
    outlined in white
    rings saddens me"
    This poem makes me want to cry and it's very sad!

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  6. Dear Jonathan......
    The poem you wrote "Sarah" was a very emotional piece. The saddest part was probably "I hold her, I never want to let go, but I must as we carry her to the car."
    The tone of this poem was sorrowful because Sarah the dog dies.

    From a sad reader, Emine

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  7. Dear Jonathan,
    Your poem Sarah, was Wonderful, I really liked it.
    " The sorrow deep in dark eyes outlined in white rings "
    I could just imagine it, this poem makes me want to cry just reading it.
    You have pretty great discription, it's like i'm there seeing & watch all of it.

    You did an awesome job!
    - Marina J

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  8. Dear Jonathan,
    In the poem Sarah, I thought you used alot of description that helped me feel the same as the owner of the dog and Know that that might happen to my dog tyson one day. I liked the lines " Now all I can do is remember, remember the gentle touch of her paw or the rough lick of her tounge against my soft cheek and th sorrow deep in dark eyes outlined in white rings

    From,
    Andrew

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  9. Dear Jonathan
    I do not know if you really wrote this poem about your beloved sarah but I was touched by the emotion in this poem because a year ago my dog maxie had his second stroke. We were at school when he had his stroke and when we got home I called out to him and I searched the house and soon I went and asked my dad were max was so I know how hard it is to lose a pet. I mean , a family member.

    Colton M.

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  10. DEAR JONATHAN TINDAL,
    SARAH WAS A VERY TOUCHING POEM, I LIKED THE BEGGINING OF THE POEM, "THE SORROW DEEP IN DARK EYES OUTLINED IN WHITE RINGS SADDENS ME".


    FROM THOMAS HALL

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  11. The poem Fantasy World was good but I had trouble understanding the literature like when it says "and fiction and Reality interwine"

    -Mark

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  12. Dear Jonathan,
    You used many descriptive words which made it easy to visualize the piece. A line I especially liked was "The sorrow deep in dark eyes outlined in white saddens me." Also, I liked how you chose to form your stanzas.

    ~alycia

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  13. Dear Jonathan
    i read your story Sarah
    when i read "the rough lick of her tongue against my cheek." it reminded me of my dog her name was Lady Dog she also died
    from Michael

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  14. Dear Jonathan Tindal,
    I really enjoyed your poem, "Sarah". I really like how you bring out the narrators feelings for her animal when you say, "I hold her, I never want, to let go, but know I must, as we carry her to the car"
    It really expresses how the narrator feels about losing her pet, and brings sorrow to the reader as I will assume you intended it to. -Hannah

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  15. Dear John,
    I read your poem Sarah and it made me think about y past dogs that we've had to say goodbye to. It was great how you told a story without telling us out front. I loved how you said ," to my touch" instead of when i feel her fur.
    Cody.

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