Friday, November 6, 2009

"Fantasy World"

18 comments:

  1. Hi Jed,
    The poem was awesome but you could have added in a little more about what the poem was about.

    Thanks
    Harry 7T

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  2. It was very deep and very good it makes you feel like you are in the story or want to be in it.

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  3. HI JED,
    I liked the poem a lot and it sounds like a video game.

    Thanks
    Harry 7T

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  4. I like the comment sun pours through the open window and into my pale blue room it makes you feel like you are in the story.

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  5. The poem is very descriptive when it says...

    "The glowing screen envelopes me,
    warm light cascades across my face,
    and the electric hum immerses me,in an endless tide."

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  6. The poem Fantasy World: The poem was very descriptive and great! It made you feel like you were in with the writer and narrator! -KARLi

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  7. This poem "Fantasy World" is a nice short poem. It makes me feel in peace and calm! The word choice is exquisite.

    -Angel

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  8. Dear Jed Chambers,
    in the poem Fantasy worl I like how you repeated the begining and end with eachother" There is a place where time doesn't pass and i control fate" it brings back to thinking about the whole poem, Great poem!

    From,
    Andrew

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  9. Dear Jed,
    You have wonderful word choice, & i don't find ths boring at all .
    I like the line
    " In this world, I am worshipped, A guardian angel, a savior, a protecter."
    ^^ this was interesting to me.
    - Marina J

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  11. Dear Jed,

    I really liked your poem. I can picture every detail of this second world. I loved the part where you said "In this world, I am worshipped." It seems you don't feel really appreciated here. Everyone should be treated the way they want to be treated in both worlds.

    From,
    Dwayne

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  12. Dear Jed,
    I read you poem "Fantay World." WOW! What an amazing job! You were able to describe your fantasy world so well that I could imagine eveythinh and I felt as if I was standing right next to you the whole time. It makes me feel like there really is a place like that somewhere out in the big wide world!

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  13. Dear Jed,

    I read your poem and it was great. It really made me think about how it would feel to be in a sichuation like that. Great word choise like intertwine in the second stanza
    Cody.

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  14. Dear Jed,
    WOW! What an amazing job on you poem "Fantasy World." I felt like I was right beside you through the entire thing! I especially felt this way when you said "The glowing screen envelopes me, warm light cascades across my face, and the electric hum immerses me in an endless tide."
    -Haley S.

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  15. Dear Jed,
    I really like your poem, the feeling you put into this just, glows!!!! I lovvvvvvveeeeeee your descriptive voice I really think that the name"Fantasy World" is wonderful it really sucks you in and you don't want it to end.I drool over the part "i am worshiped-a gardian angel,a savior,a protecter. I can really see this place,
    the stone cathoedrals,darkened skies,Garden of Eden.
    It's so dark, so mysterious..... I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!

    From,
    Juluana

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  16. Dear Jed,
    I read Fantasy world and it was great. It really made me think about how it would feel to be in that sichulation like that. Great word choise when you said intertwine in your second stanza.
    Cody.

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  17. DEAR JED,
    FANTESY WORLD WAS A GREAT POEM!I LIKE HOW YOU USED GREAT FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE, THE PART I LIKED THE MOST WAS: "WHERE STONE CATHEDRALS PIERCE DARKENED SKIES, AND FICTION AND REALITY INTERTWINE"!!!!!!!!!!

    FROM THOMAS HALL

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  18. dear Jed i read your story FANTASY WORLD
    I liked the part that says
    "in this world
    i am woshipped-
    a guardian angel,
    a savior, a protector"
    because that reminded me of the people that are serving in the war now and in the past that protected the country in bad times

    from Michael

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